On Fri, 22 Aug 1997 15:39:13 -0700, Eric Adams
<eric.adams@decisionone.COM> wrote:

i really like this story, so far out of your series i liked this one the
best.

Thanks for the compliment!

 I found amusing that Genma would say stuff about hiding behind an
animals form when he is so guilty of that himself.  The hypocrite!

Yup.

anyways, a few problems with the story only center around the two weeks
it took for Akari and Ryouga to realize their love.  It hardly seems
feasible.  a longer period of time might have been more rewarding, on
the other hand the story might proceed better if you gave us some
insight into what occured during those two weeks might be fruitful and
remove that sort of awkward feeling.

I'll think about this...

As for Ryouga's parents showing up at the wedding, is not entirely
necessary or unecessary, the story works fine either way and they would
only be there as a side issue.  I think in a way though, that Ryouga is
leaving behind a bit of his life, burning bridges so to speak, it
depends on the kind of future relationship you want Ryouga to have with
his parents, he seems a wee bit resentful of them in this story.

He is, somewhat. Whether that'll continue in the future, time will tell.
It'll depend on them being around once in a while, which is uncertain...

Kaede isnt that the old one eyed woman in that story?

In Inu-Yasha, yes. This version is a little different (she has both
eyes, for one thing).

Thanks for writing!


Gary Kleppe
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