I'm about to post episodes 3-5 of my Tenchi lemon series. I'm also 
going to repost revised versions of episodes 1 and 2.

Please send any C&C directly to happosai@jps.net as I'm not on the 
FFML right now due to problems with my ISP. Likewise, apologies to 
anyone who posted C&C to the list about my stories previously and 
didn't get a reply from me because of the problem. Hopefully, I can 
make the bakas fix it sometime soon.

Any C&C will be appreciated. Just a few notes:

1. If you're concerned that Aeka is exceedingly bitchy in Episode #3, 
don't worry, I'm not going to keep painting her that harshly. Maybe 
she was having PMS that day. :)

2. I *really* want to know if my characterization of Tenchi's views 
of Ryoko and Aeka work. I was trying to develop some reason why he 
hasn't done (lemon-wise) what most males his age would have, beyond 
the real-world "that's not what the script said" answer.

3. I *really* *really* want to know if the "Ryoko is a hungry 
kitty-cat" works well, or if I went overboard with it.

4. Let me know what you *think* is going to happen subsequent to 
this. I've tried to toss in a decent amount of foreshadowing and red 
herrings, and I want to know if they're working.

5. Is the Freudian symbolism OAV #1/2 reinterpretation dream in 
Episode #3 good, bad, indifferent, or what?

6. And anything else.

Arigato


Hassheen!