At 21:54 8/15/97 -0400, you wrote:

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MegaTokyo 2034

Of Failure and Victory
A Bubble Gum Crisis Fanfiction
by Deunan(deunan@aol.com)

Hmmm...  I must say that for some reason, of all the 'fics in this series,
I liked this one the least.  It's not because of the darkfic aspects; that
much I know, or at least not directly because of them.  Perhaps it's
because they aren't shocking enough, or something.  I don't know...
Perhaps someone else can point out what it is that this story seems to be
missing...

 -Andrew (who thinks that your story is otherwise okay, especially for one
so short)