At 10:40 PM 7/30/97 -0400, you wrote:

Thanks to all those who have given me C&C and keeps me writing this series.
This part has been expanded considerably regarding the dream scene, the R/U
scenes and an expanded ending.  Hope you enjoy it :)

                                               Adrian Wong
               

*sigh* You really need to work on your formatting. Your previous two parts
to this fic looked 200% better than this copy I have in front of me. The
story keep on breaking off halfway and after a while it does get a bit
annoying. You have a few minor spelling mistakes but that can be easily
corrected. The new additions to the fic looks good but Ranma came across to
me as a bit of a playboy, unlike the way he was portrayed in your previous
version. I like the previous one better (both when it refers to Ranma and
Ukyo, especially the garden scene) I would have thought that Ukyo would be
more cautious as she got recently dumped and Ranma more nervous with his
first time with 'the cutiest girl' he has seen. On the positive side, this
fic looks very good; hopefully I don't have to be well versed in Romeo and
Julliet to get it's meaning, do I? Waiting patiently for the next part....
 

                        End Part 3    
                               
>From Adrian Wong  <711788@ican.net>
July 28, 1997.

MT
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