On Tue, 12 Aug 1997 17:52:34 -0500, you wrote:

At 04:55 AM 8/11/97 GMT, OneShot wrote:

 "You guys have to get out of here!" Priss told Nene "It's a goddamn moster!
It's got projectiles that's far worse than any boomer we ever encountered!"

 Why would Priss say "projectiles"?  Ranma's attacks would look like
directed energy attacks.

Ooh, that sounds better. I'll go change it :)

 Priss and Nene watched silently as the boomer slowly made its way toward

them.

They were holding their breath, not daring to breath. In just a few short
seconds, it would all be over. They both kenw that boomers had a weak spot

that

they couldn't see what was coming up from behind them.

 What is the reference for this boomer weakness?  I would think that
combat boomers would have at least a simple proximity motion detector for
their rear.

I was just taking a guess. I have no idea what boomers possess, and what they're
capable of.

 "We must retreat!" Linna said as she slowly got to her feet "Our suits

can't

take much more damage!" She was shocked to look down and see a large chunk of
her armor fall to the floor. The armors exoskeleton had fallen off. All that
remained was the thin inner armor that protected her body. She saw shocked to
see her other two friends' armor fall off.
 The blast enveloped Nene entirely. Before the blast abated, he launched a
massive ki-blast "Mouko Takabisha" Ranma watched with a smirk as the ki-blast
was popelled forward from his hurricane blast. He watched at the boomer stuck
its had out to block it, but it was useless.The blast struck the boomer at

such

intensity that it was blown backward several years, sliding on the ground

to a
                                             ^^^^^

 Now that is a powerful blast.  

How come I have the funny feelin' it's sarcastic ;)

 Nene was shaken terribly from the impact of that blast, but thanks to her
suit, she wasn't killed. She knew she would have the biggest headache the

next

 Didn't she lose her most of her armor before?  How would the remaining
armor protect her so well? 

Yes...I remembered that part...but I guess I never bothered to indicate that her
inner armor saved her. 

 Ranma continued to look at the boomer curiously. He didn't really need

to kill

these boomers. If he met them again, he would be able to defeat them again.
During thise battle, he had only exerted a fraction of his energy. There

was no

 Wasn't Ranma concerned earlier in the story about the amount of energy
that he had used? 

Yeah...as I wrote, I decided to give Ranma obscene powers...I guess I forgot to
get rid of that paragraph when I was doin' the revision.

need to kill these boomers. He didn't have to worry about them returning

back to

Genom headquarters and give them data on his fighting abilites because all of
his energy came from his ki, and there was no way Genom could reporduce

that. Ki

was something only humans could possess.

 "Ms. Madigan, I would like you to meet our new special consultant on
bio-energy weapons, Mr. Tarou."

Are these real characters from BGC?

that,

she thought. This boomer was acting human. There was no way a human could
genterate this much power "You're not human. You lie" She gritted her

teeth as

pain shot throughout her body as she cocked her arm back. She was about to

cave

this boomer's face in, but the pain was too much for her to bare.

 There should be more doubt of Ranma's statement that he is human.  What
the Knight Sabers have seen him do would be considered superhuman. 

I extended that scene, where they wouldn't believe him...but it got a bit
tedious, so I left it out. I figured it would make the story flow better.

that Genom created. The boomer went beserk and killed her. the boomer should
have never been created in the first place. And for that, I'm gonna make

Genom

regret having done so. It's all personal"

 Waahhh!!  You killed Ucchan!  

What....is that wrong? Sheould I kill off Akane instead? All I'll hafta do is
change the name ;)

 In reference to another post about age, I personally think that Ranma
should be in his 50's.  It explains his incredible power levels and combat
expertise and permits you to dabble with the Ranmaverse characters' lives
post 1997.  Ranma could still be youthful looking, either a function of his
curse or of his martial arts training.

I'm still not too sure on that yet. As of right now, I want him to be in his
late 20s....but if I made his in him 50s...then I won't hafta explain how he got
there in the first place....

                                                                        dml

-OneShot
Jeffrey Keith Wong: jeffwong@li.net
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