In a message dated 97-08-11 06:40:50 EDT, you write:

I like that. I had never occured to me that one's center of balance might

be

 disrupted by somethin' like a tail. Pretty creative :)

Actually I got that from early Dragon Ball and Early Dragon Ball Z from when
Gokuu and Gohan last there tails.

Huh? That's, like, a really confusing paragraph...how can Ukyo see part of

her

soul being taken and such....

Well as to this part it's more of a feeling than actual sight.

Why is she in pain? I figured losin' part of one's soul; would be a

spiritual

thing, not physical ;)

All the pain is in her head but I should mention more about that

but you're gonna hafta explain that tail thing...how
did he get it....

Actually that was ganna be explained in the second chapter, but I could do
little explaination in this part.