On Sun, 10 Aug 1997 16:15:00 +1100, you wrote:

Cordial Girl.

Doesn't cordial also mean bein' nice or somethin'? <shruggs>Oh well....

Ginta: It just occurred to me, we all looks so basically similar, if we
all shaved our heads nobody would be able to tell us apart! 

Miki: Oooohhh! 

Yuu: You’re a real thinker, aren’t you? 

I liked this one. I gave me a good laugh :)

Arimi: That’s right. I’m just here for a cameo appearance. I’ll be back
later though, to stir up more trouble.

I liked the cliche. It's especially funny considerin' who's sayin' 'em :)
I liked this little in joke...

Namura: Saved by the bell! That’s all folks... See you next time.

I wonder how many people will realize what shows Namura is saying from....

Takuji: That’s O.K. I remember when I was your age, and at the same
school. You remind me of someone I know... 

Yuu: Another story... 

Takuji: You don’t have to listen to my sage-like advice... but it could
come in handy. Oh well. I’ll see you later, Yuu... 

This is just screaming of IN-joke...but I'm not too sure what it is....

Miki: (super deformed) WHAT!!!!!! (Thinking, this time with stormy
background.) He’s changed the subject AGAIN!!! There must be someone
else! Who could it be? Don’t you love me, Yuu?

Typical Miki paranoia. Good job :)

Good job with Yuu also...he's very IC. So are the parents....

Tsutomu: WHAT DISCRACE! THIS IS MY DISTINCTIVE SPEECH PATTERN!!! 

FTOFL ^o^

Jin: (gravely) Now Miki, We didn’t know you were going to hold a party.
(breaks into a big grin) IT’S LUCKY WE 
BROUGHT STREAMERS!!!!

Man, this gave me the chills. That exactly how the parents would react.


I liked the story. I was very funny. It made me laugh several times.
I liked how the story dialog. I noticed this was a dialog based story, and I
wouldn't have it any other way. I liked it when Miki changes into SD form. :)
Well, I saw MB a while ago, so I'm no longer all that familiar with it, but I'm
glad I was familiar with it enought to enjy the story...

-OneShot
Jeffrey Keith Wong: jeffwong@li.net
http://www.rit.edu/~jkw7063/fanfic/index.htm
http://www.li.net/~jeffwong/index.htm
The latter site has been updated on Aug 4th.