I can't say this was a bad fanfic, I can't say it was a great one
either it was good. I have trouble believing in the shock ending, it
just seemed too contrived, too abrupt. This should either have been
much shorter or much longer. As it is, I just am not satisfied with the
way the plot works. It is a good idea and the concept of the first part
is a pretty good one it the ending to the first one and the second part
I thought underdone.

Rick Robinson


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