Might as well tell you up front that I liked this story. (Despite
the fact that its taking time away from the REST of your incomplete
stories. ::Begins chanting "1996 Chapter, 1996 Chapter"::)
I was wondering if this is gonna be a long series of fics, not just
based on this one Timegate thingy.
One of these days you'll have to tell us how Lina Inverse got
there... but its not important now.
The following was my chain of thought when I read the story the
second time. Take no offence to these comments, and know that I
almost ALWAYS talk Sarcastically.
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The Black Moon Crisis began on May 25, 2986.
Hmmm... 2986... something about that number is bothering me...
Fortunately, their obsession made them dramatically resistant to
any offers to join forces with any of the other powers which had
been
opposed to us. The Venerian ambassador that was dispatched to
negotiate
with "the undisputed new rulers of Earth" was teleported back to
the
Corporate Board Room on Venus a few minutes after his arrival on
Nemesis.
Venus isn't allied with Earth?
In twenty seven pieces. One by one.
Now I've heard of drawn and quartered .... but this is a little
obsessive. He was probably put into a Chunky Soup can and put on
display.
We never found out what happened to the Centauri ambassador.
Perhaps that's for the best.
I'm sure they Saut�ed him and fed him to their Droids.
An Inevitable Outcome Feature
Written and Directed
by C. Richard Davies
The Further Adventures Of
SHEILA TENKAI
Chapter One:
"Before Dawn; Descent"
(OP Sequence: Images of Sheila -- of course -- Erica, Michelle,
Ryouko
Mizuno, and the Inner Senshi flashing past in a frenetic, music
videolike
atmosphere, while a sped-up version of Meat Loaf's "I Would Do
Anything
For Love (But I Won't Do That)" plays. The final image, over the
lines
But I'll never stop dreaming of you every night of my life, no
way.
And I would do anything for love, oh I would do anything for
love
I would do anything for love, but I won't do that, no I won't do
that.
is of Sheila, leaning against a picture window through which we can
see
Twentieth Century Tokyo. We pull away from the window to see that
she is
standing a floor beneath where Erica and Michelle stand, holding
each
other closely.)
I'm not sure what Sheila won't do for love, but I'll keep looking.
Almost everyone got a chuckle out of that. Maybe the two of them
had known that would happen, and that had been why they'd done it.
I
didn't laugh, or even crack a smile. I was in no mood to listen to
my
former lover's jokes while my *current* lover was missing, and
possibly
in serious danger.
Well.. she seems awfully casual about this..
Lina ran a hand through her unruly carrot-like hair, pushing it
out of her frustrated face. "I'm as sure as I *can* be, given the
givens," she bit out in her kazoo-like voice.
This is the greatest description of her voice I've ever heard. LOL!
The resistance's communications officer, a middle-aged African
woman with bluish-white hair, stood up, and adressed us. "The
Space Force
has allied with all the space capable Martian Principalities. The
Mercurians have also joined their forces, as have most of the
Jovian
moons. Jurai has sent a small fleet of White Star corvettes.
Apparently,
they've got troubles of their own, so that's all we can expect for
the
time being." She paused to let the idea sink in. "So there's a
rather
large armada in orbit over Graviton City, waiting for a signal from
the
Queen."
I suppose we'll hear whats going on at Jurai in another story? I
thought they were the superpower of the Galaxy. Hard to imagine
they're having any trouble at all, what with Kei and Yuri heading up
the defense forces.
I forget weather or not A-Ko and B-ko are in your massive crossover
future.
A hologram of Nemesis, with a marker reading "THEORIZED STRUCTURE
OF PLANETOID, BASED ON SCANS" beneath it, materialized over the
conference
room table.
I'm having flashbacks to Wing Commander III.
The detail drawing of Nemesis closed on the image of the single
large city on the planetoid, drawing in on a pair of pillars. "The
Black
Moon Family has a Time Gate of their own."
Star Trek anyone? When does the Dominion show up? :)
"I am the Guardian of FOREVER..."
"... then none of this should be happening, and they should simply
have gone back to just before the Unification War and prevented
Serenity
from ever gaining power," Ritsuko interrupted. I shot a look at my
"cousin" even as I nodded in agreement. That had sounded
suspiciously
prepared ...
"Correct," Sylia agreed. "However, it is possible that they don't
realize that they can do that."
Of course not... would make this a very short story if they did.
Sylia gave us all a moment to work our way around the concept. I
got it a moment after Ritsuko began to speak. "Dr. Stingray --"
"Ms."
Can I ask why this is? She suddenly appalled to the idea of having
a title?
"If she won't stand aside after that, kill her."
Oh, I'm sure *this* will be an easy task.
"Answer 1," she replied in the same tone after a moment, "it was
on the data disc that Serenity left me, the same one with the
military
command codes and ... other things."
"She's a genius! I swear it!" -Washuu
Anyway, after a few moments, I could pull away and look up at her.
Those gorgeous red-brown eyes, the ones you could drown in, were
looking
at me with so much ... gentleness ... that I could almost believe
that she
really was related to the Queen somehow.
"Gentleness" is a Word you don't hear often when talking about
Priss.
I nodded. If she and I could ever have made it work ... I had
sabotaged any way it could happen, a long time ago.
You mean when you told her you didn't want to go anywhere with her,
causing her to go back in time and rescue someone she loved more.
yeah.. Sabotage is a good word.
"The hell she wouldn't," I answered calmly. "And besides ... if
we pull it off, she'll be alive, right?"
You don't get this whole time-travel concept, do you Sheila?
I tried several times before the words came out. "She wanted her
ashes to be spread over the San Andreas Fault. If ... if the
mission
doesn't pull off, would you --"
Oh, you mean the coast line... :)
I'd like to state right off the bat that while I have dropped
Sheila down a deep, dark hole, I fully intend to give her the
chance to
climb out again. As Priss realizes, Sheila is going in on this
mission
without any regard for her own life. Ultimately, the experiences
she's
going to have will teach her just how precious and important her
life
really is.
I don't like how you said "*chance* to climb out again." But
considering the title of this fic, I assume its alright.
"Sailor Moon" was created by Naoko Takeuchi and brought to North
America by DiC. "Bubblegum Crisis" was created by Toshimichi
Suzuki and
others and brought to North America by AnimEigo. "Mobile Police
Patlabor"
was created by Yuuki Masami and brought to North America by U.S.
Manga
Corps, Manga Video, and Viz Communications. (BUY THE MANGA!)
YIKES! Subliminal messages!
Nobody sue me, okay?
I'm pretty sure you're not in any danger. The more you write, the
more you are straying from the actual timelines written by these
companies. In fact, I'd so much as to say that this story could
probably be sold without any qualms from the above companies.
NOT to say that it should, Megacorporations have the unusual ability
to bend the law.
Cheers to you, Chris.
Adam Chris Leigh
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