On Sun, 03 Aug 1997 23:46:26 -0400, Eric Adams <eda104@erols.com> wrote:

Overall, this is an allright story, however your first one inspired
mystery and intrique and left you wondering what was happening while
this one seemed kind of forced.  Like it was a story that you simply
wanted to write to get it over with.

Well, I did have definite reasons for writing this particular chapter,
though certain parts may have been put in just to get to other parts...

 For instance Ukyou's reaction to
seeing Kuno after 5 years is rather undramatic.

That's true, I really wasn't to sure how she would react. I'll try to
think about how I can fix this up.

If you (or anyone else) can think of any other scenes that you felt this
way about, I hope you'll let me know.

 One of the more
intriguing aspects of the story is what Mikado is going to do.  A

Heh. One thing you can be sure of, he's going to make the punishment fit
the crime.

startling revelation though about her, Ranma and Okonomiyaki, its an
idea worth exploring.

Thanks very much for your comments!


Gary Kleppe
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