Overall, this is an allright story, however your first one inspired
mystery and intrique and left you wondering what was happening while
this one seemed kind of forced. Like it was a story that you simply
wanted to write to get it over with. For instance Ukyou's reaction to
seeing Kuno after 5 years is rather undramatic. One of the more
intriguing aspects of the story is what Mikado is going to do. A
startling revelation though about her, Ranma and Okonomiyaki, its an
idea worth exploring.
Later,
--Eric