I thought the first time was a typo since you only used it once. But her name 
is spelled "BELLDANDY", double L.

She and her husband, Keiichi Morisato, were unable

to have an issues for it was a necessary sacrifice if she wanted her
husband to be with her for as long as she lived.<<

I think you need to rewrite this sentence. Let me get this straight: Whatever 
means she used to let Keiichi be immortal, it caused them both to be childless. 
Right? Your delivery needs to be improved.

	She glanced once more at the picture Alanna had drawn of her before
returning to her duties and supervising her kitchen staff.

She must have a lot of kids, if she needs STAFF!

carrying a load of things that could not have possibly fit in such a small 

knapsack >she had slung behind her.

So was she carrying the things in her hands or were they in her knapsack?

Of course, she had done a quick check on the guy.

I pretty much suspected she would do that once she got back to Heaven.

The records clearly indicated that he was prone to doing hentai-ish things. 

That >alone made her wonder just why Kami-sama  had gifted the man with a wish.

The Lord works in mysterious ways....

And you spelled "from" as "form". Oops!
Other than that, I look forward to the rest of this fic.