This is an excellent story.  I can't wait to see what the other 
characters have been up to for the last five years.  I have a few quick 
questions about this part, that maybe you can address.

1)  In the very first section, when Shampoo talks, she sounds exactly 
like she does in the manga/anime.  If she's been in Japan for five years 
now, shouldn't her Japanese have improved to the point that you don't 
have to write in her "accent" anymore?

2)  The love potion thing confused me.  If it was supposed to last a 
day, why did its effects simply disappear when Ranma turned back to a 
guy?  If it only worked on the opposite sex, shouldn't it still be in 
effect, and he would fall for the next female he saw?  If not, shouldn't 
he still "love" Kuno, even as a guy?  Either of those options seems like 
the most likely, and if you want to keep the section as is, an 
explanation of why it worked that way might be good.



Joshua Dyal
j-dyal@geocities.com
http://www.geocities.com/TimesSquare/Arcade/1958/


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