As always, a well-polished draft. As an example of the kind,
Ranma's-best-friend version of Ukyo, it's very strong. The imagery comes
through well, although there is room for additional visuals. Claire is
good at showing quiet moments in which relationships change or grow; in
this one, two of the Ranma loners discover common ground, even though
one of them spends the whole time as a pig.

Only questions/problems I note here: Can Ukyo actually lift Ryoga's
umbrella? Would it take her so long to recognize P-Chan?

Again, overall a good draft.

DRM 

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