<mdlerma2@gsbpop.uchicago.edu> writes:

First impression -

 This story was well written with good description where needed but
without becoming bogged down in detail.  The only real criticism I 
have of
it is that it is not a fanfiction.  Only minor modification would be
required to turn this into a standalone story.  It uses the names from
Ranma, but that is about the only connection to anime that the story
possesses.   It does not use any plot device or character feature that 
is
distinctly of the Ranmaverse.   If you want it to be a Ranma story, 
then I
suggest that you revise it to be more closely connected to the 
Ranmaverse.

I don't necessarily agree.  Just because something doesn't utilize what
we see as strictly Ranmaverse characteristics doesn't keep it from being
a fanfiction.  It's just a different kind of fanfic, to me.  And one that
I consider well-written as well.  :)  It shows us a different side of
Nabiki and Ranma, and they wouldn't necessarily react the same way as
usual after such a thing happened.  I know very few girls who would stay
exactly the same after a rape, and unfortunately, I've had that put to
the test.  

I think the author had a sound look, if a little too short for my taste. 
I would have rather seen much more of the angst, etc, that went into this
story.  But that's just me.

 On a purely spammish note, does anyone think that Godai is related 
to
Shampoo?  His grandmother has quite a resemblance to Cologne and seems 
just
as terrifying.

Nah!  Oba-san is *much* cooler than Cologne.  After all, how many times
do you see *Cologne's* teeth shine?!  <HG>

Miyaka

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