At 03:00 AM 7/19/97 -0400, Tobimaro@aol.com wrote:

Well, I do like this story.  It's rather interesting in its own way, rather
melancholy, but nice.

Hmmm... I've never had something put quite like that, interesting....

One comment.  Perhaps you need to reread your story.  I did notice some
places where the sentences would have read better if you had used the correct
punctuations, especially some places which cried out for a comma.

True, I should have known to read through it first.

I do really like the story.  It just needs a little sprucing up.

Thank you.


Doug
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