First impression -

  This story was well written with good description where needed but
without becoming bogged down in detail.  The only real criticism I have of
it is that it is not a fanfiction.  Only minor modification would be
required to turn this into a standalone story.  It uses the names from
Ranma, but that is about the only connection to anime that the story
possesses.   It does not use any plot device or character feature that is
distinctly of the Ranmaverse.   If you want it to be a Ranma story, then I
suggest that you revise it to be more closely connected to the Ranmaverse.


  On a purely spammish note, does anyone think that Godai is related to
Shampoo?  His grandmother has quite a resemblance to Cologne and seems just
as terrifying.


dml