I think this story is interesting...especially the Ranma/Ukyou pairing 
(you ARE going to let Ranma end up with Ukyou in this story right?) I'm 
tired of seeing Ranma ending up with Akane all the time.

BTW, a suggestion about your style of writing; I find that stories 
written in past tense (as opposed to ones written in present tense like 
yours was) are somewhat easier to read.