Subject: Re: C&C Onna: Red Side Ch 6
From: SQUN29A@prodigy.com ( KOUMA RYODACHI)
Date: 7/10/1997, 3:56 AM
To: majks@cyberx.com
CC: fanfic@fanfic.com

Kira:  Did she do this in public?

This is Nerima, would anyone *notice*?

SKJAM!:  Oops.  Well, she remembers where the Nekohanten is, I hope.


Nope..fortunately that isn't a problem...

Kira:  (silly voice):  Yaahhh!!  Run away!

(Casper voice) Awwww MAN!

SKJAM!:  Don't you just love weirdness overload?

Yes, I am rather fond of GRIT.

Oh, you mean this fanfic. Ah, heh heh heh... <sweatdrop>

Kira:  Guess the girls didn't think that if Hikaru was possessing 
someone, 
they'd want their body back...

(Imagine Ranma's body as the pay binoculars in the first episode of 
MKR...you'll get a great laugh out of this scene if you think about 
it that way...)

SKJAM!:  yes, that's right, Ranma, Akane hit you on the head too 
hard and 
you've been living as a girl for the past year :-)

<snicker>

Kira:  ~\o Gonna turn my brown eyes blue o/~

I thought it went "Don't it make my brown eyes blue"? Oh well, it's 
been years since I bothered to pay attention to country music anyways.
..

SKJAM!:  Major uh-oh here...  Ranma must still be addled.  he'd 
better 
hope Umi or Fuu don't call the pig Ryouga in front of Akane...Heck, 
they 
might tell *Hikaru* the pig's name is Ryouga, and won't that be a 
pretty 
picture...

<shrug> Ranma never calls him P-chan when he's actually a pig, except 
to mock him. At least, not that I can recall...

Kira:  yes, definite blowing of Ryouga's secret ID here if the girls 
find 
out about the hot water thing later...

Could happen...time will tell...

SKJAM!:  Okay, now everyone knows everyone else's name, though They 
might 
wish otherwise later...

"Sometimes you wanna go...where everybody knows your name..."

Kira:  In a public coffee shop?  Ranma is being really careless here.
..]

ACK! This was a bit of a rush on my part, which led to this glaring 
error. I meant for this to occur in the RESTROOM of the coffee shop. 


That WILL get fixed when I revise this chapter.

SKJAM!:  Or, to quote Shirow's "Orion", "Does this place have a 
never-ending supply of weird shit?!"

ROFL! 

Kira:  Amazingly cogent observation...

Personally I think Ryouga just likes checking out Ranma-chan's bod. 
<snicker>

Jodan! Jodan yo! <dodges rocks, bricks, mallets, anvils, and spells>

Kira:  RAnma isn't going to pour cold water over Ryouga in front of 
the 
girls, is he?

Even Ranma isn't *that* dense. 

SKJAM!:  Must've had a stash under the table.

Didn't you know? Scientists finally figured out where Ryouga manages 
to find his clothes all the time. Turns out he has an ENORMOUS 
hyperspace pocket dimension in his bandana. Every time he turns into 
a pig, his clothes, umbrella, and backpack fall in there--and even if 
they don't, he always has spares. That's also where all those 
bandanas come from.

Kira:  (Umi voice): And how would you know all this, oh boy who 
we've 
never seen before?

<snicker> Yep, Umi would definitely say something like that. Of 
course, she's probably used to stuff like that now, after dealing 
with Madoshi Clef...

Kira:  (Fuu voice):  Ara, like the pig!  You're the pig!  How 
Kawaii!

I'm supposing that Fuu and Umi didn't actually hear Ranma call the 
pig Ryouga, since he was talking quietly. I'll work that out when, as 
I said, I revise this beast.

SKJAM!:  And the level of violence de-escalated rapidly...(It's been 
at 
least an hour, probably more, and no discussion in Nerima could 
possibly 
go that long without a fight breaking out :-)

Unless they were all too busy pigging out on fine Joketsuzoku ramen 
to get all rowdy. <g>

(hey, it COULD happen. After all, the only thing they all like to do 
more than fight is eat, and that applies to ALL of them, ne? Think 
about it.)

(....Ever notice how the martial artists always have ENORMOUS 
appetites?)

(And sorceresses and swordsmen too...okay, I'll shut up now...)

Kira:  Well, that's a change.  Although glomping yourself isn't much 
of a 
thrill...

Another one of my really glaring errors in this chapter.  I should 
have proofread this one, but at the time I was just concentrating on 
moving the story along and getting it posted before I fell asleep. 

But, as I said, it will be fixed.

SKJAM!:  Technically not true...the actual engagement came after the 

explanation of the curse, which could be considered "getting to 
know" 
Ranma. 

Touche.

Kira:  What database is she tapped into?

tendou-nabiki.omniscient-beings.org.jp <grin>

SKJAM!:  yep, which is always a consideration in "Ranma turns girl 
mentally" fics...

Hai, sou desu.

Kira:  Telepathy is a wonderful gift, but one should always be 
ethical in 
its applications.

Yeah...at least they aren't like Vince and Amy Tagle yet <g>

SKJAM!:  I hope this isn't going to happen too often.  It's a nasty 

vulnerability...

More than likely they'll only do this at night, when they're asleep. 
I won't comment on Ranma's intelligence, but he does have common 
sense about SOME things, and Hikaru's sensible...they'll figure it 
out.

Kira:  her mental self-image, I guess.

Pinpon!

Kira:  obviously, both their self-images are pretty positive :-)

Ain't it great? ^_^

SKJAM!:  Though if you keep blacking out, it may be a good idea to 
keep 
the conversations to a minimum.

Like I said, best saved for sleeptime. After all, while the body is 
resting and recharging, they can go on like this for hours in REM 
sleep...

SKJAM!:  Wonder how much censoring they'll do...And Ranma's take on 
the 
various people in his life is likely to influence Hikaru unduly at 
first.

I'm considering actually adding this scene into the chapter. I didn't 
at first because 1) it was late and I was tired and 2) I wasn't sure 
how much it might bore everyone. But, I'll probably do something with 
this, to round out the chapter...

SKJAM!:  Hmm, Hikaru still hasn't woken up in the male body yet.  
Wonder 
if she can...?

I'll admit, I've thought about that one. All I can say is time will 
tell.

As always, thanks for the C&C! It's been most useful on this chapter, 
the most hastily thrown-together one of the whole lot. (I really have 
to work to clean this one up...oy VEY...)









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