The Game is Cat and Mouse 
by jeff shelton 
     jws1@webtv.net 
 
Chapter 1   Set up 
 
"Shampoo! I'm here!  Where are you! " shouts Akane. 
"I here, Violent Girl."  Comes the reply, out of the rafters above Akane. 

	"I here, Violent Girl," comes ...   (Note comma after Girl)

 
" Why, did you challenge me in this place Shampoo? Why challenge me in

	"Why did you ... this place, Shampoo?    (Right number of commas, 
though.)

Girl destroyed Shampoo's date." comes the reply echoing thru the room. 

	...date," comes ...	(Comma again)

Akane stops looking and thinks back to the last time she saw Ranma and
Shampoo together. Shampoo was all over Ranma in a very tight, very
revealing, very nice dress. Akane saw the sweat on Ranma's forehead,

	(Ranma in a very tight, ... dress?  Possible, but ambiguous.  Who 
had the dress?)

heard the sutter in his voice, and something made her throw her ice

	stutter

escape her dress and Ranma-chan ripping it and everything to shreds

	dress, and ... 		(everything?)

nice date. Shampoo very mad at Akane. Shampoo find perrrfect way to get

		... perrrfect...   Nice ^_^

around so Shampoo can not sneak up behind her. "Well come on! Are you
afraid of me!" 

	...afraid of me?"
  
 
Shampoo thinks as she watches Akane struggle out of her gi. 'to bad i
could not find the real jusenkyo water. however the instant jusenkyo
spring water salts do come in handy. till it wears off lets play and
have some fun!' 

	Tricky here, what with Shampoo talk and all.  Perhaps:
...struggle out of her gi, 'Too bad I ... . However ...  Till it wears off, 
lets play ...
 
 
End chapter 1 

I do hope at least somebody enjoys this.

	Yes!  It was *great* fun.
 
authors notes

	author's

I expect an action scene *would* be hard to describe.  Perhaps it might be 
better to leave the details of "Tom and Jerry" to the readers' imagination, 
and concentrate on the aftermath.  Clearly Akane is going to be terrified 
out of her mind.  I suspect that when the instant powder wears off, Akane 
will be furiously angry.  I hope Shampoo has some hot water ready for 
herself, otherwise she is in for a lot of pain.  

If she is able to transform back before Akane changes the game to Mallet the Cat,  a simple threat of re-applying the dose should cause Akane to retreat.  It won't stop Akane's anger, of course, which will 
probably be deflected against the person Akane will hold responsible for the 
entire episode.  Ranma, of course.

Can Shampoo "condition" Akane into non-interference?  Did Pavlov study the 
effects of negative conditioning?  How much pain can Ranma take?  


S h a z o r n				No, I'm not an otaku!
<rayburn@cc.umanitoba.ca>		But I'm working on it... ^_^;