Just finished this one. So, these comments are very much off the cuff
Looks good so far. I want to see more of this.
I think that the dialog, and the characterisations as shown are very good. I
am very impressed with the pacing: The story moves well. Going from
reaction to reaction without bogging down on any one scene nor seeming to
skimp in any of what's being shown.
I also like the hints you give for Ryouga's guilt.
Please continue this. I look forward to reading more of it.
-Mike (the OtakuLoki)