Follow Me Into Darkness
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By She-Hulk (brobinso@neocomm.net)

SPOILERS IN MY COMMENTS


What can I say, but Wow!  This is a really terrific story.  I thought things
were handled quite well, and the description, especially of Priss's trailer,
was very effective. I know *I* wouldn't want to set foot in there without a
full set of Anti-C's!

The lemon material came across as an intrinsic part of the story, rather
than solely for titilation, which was nice in a lemon.


<SPOILERS>
Another interesting thing was that by reading between the lines, this story,
obstensibly about Sylia "saving" Priss, is really about Sylia finding
another way to *use* Priss.  For instance, but there's a story point about
Priss not being totally willing to die for Sylia. At the end of the story,
there's a line about how now Priss *will* be willing to do anything,
including die, for Sylia.

I sort of wonder what Sylia's real motivations were for having gotten those
motorcycle leathers when she did.  Security for the Knight Sabers
Organization, or something else?
</SPOILERS>


Technically, beyond what has been said by others, I found a section near the
end where there seems to be a slight problem with tenses  ("Mackie had given
it a tune up as only he can"), but it was minor.


I think this story is well worth reading, if you haven't already!  A nice
job by the author :) 



I missed this story when it first came out, but Chris Davies was kind enough
to forward a copy to me.  Thanks Chris!



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