At 08:39 PM 5/23/97 +0000, Slashtooth@evnet.com wrote:

Ok, I have written the first bit of my Ranma 1/2 Zena crossover, and
would like some opinions on it.  Also, since I am posting, a bit of
spam.  the fact that the list is now semi-moderated is something I have
seem coming, I just hope that the list won't suffer because of it. 
Anyway, on with the story/teaser, and as always, C&C is needed!

Well, the first bit of C+C is that her name is spelled "Xena", not "Zena".

The second bit of C+C (and standard C+C, especially for *me* because I can't
spell!) is to run your spell checker  ^_^

   "Because he said a village needed our help, you idiot."  Akane

increased her

pace to pull up next to Ryoga.  "You DO know where your going, right?"

you're

   The three of them forced their way through a thick wall of vines, to find
themselves in front of a cave.  'All right!' thought Ryoga, 'This is the cave i

I

blasted on my way out!  I finally got the right path!'  "Follow me, this is the
way!" Ryoga said over his shoulder as he entered the cave.

   As the trio travelled he tunnel, 

the tunnel

   They continued down the tunnel, finally reaching the end.  "The village
should be near here, just a couple of miles.  We had better hurry!"  Ryoga ran
off at that, Ranma and Akane following.  As the village started to come into
view, they all stopped, staring in shock.

Huh?  Ryoga actually took off in the right direction?

   The headman looked up at Ryoga, hope starting to appear on his face.
"Thank the gods!  I was afraid you wouldn't make it!  Even the lady that came
shortly after you left said that stopping them would be trouble.  He's over
there, in the pub if you want to talk to her."

He's over there if you want to talk to her?  I realize Xena is in a
predominantly male profession, but *really*!  ^_-

   Ryoga took the lead again, and walked over to the table they were sitting
at.  "I hear that your here to help the village.  

you're

Secretly, she liked the look that
people got when the recognised Zena.

when they

Sorry, but for right now, your stuck like that.

you're

She had never seem anything like that before, 

seen


and wanted to know everything

about it, but it didn't look like he, no she, no... whomever was not in the

mood

to talk.

   "As near as I can figure, there is nothing in this town that the warlord
wants.  However, past this village there is a wealthy town, so all I can figure
is that's where there going, 

they're



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