On Wed, 14 May 1997 17:08:05 -0400, Lizsue <lizsue@MIT.EDU> wrote:

KODACHI: (Walks into the room.) "Hi Ranma!  I got you some flowers!" (Throws
        a bouquet of black roses at Ranma.) "Yay!  The evil Tendo girl 
        isn't here!"

This doesn't sound much like Kodachi to me. Too friendly and informal. I
think she would say something like, "Dearest Ranma-sama! I have brought
some flowers for you, my one and only true love! How fortunate that the
evil Tendo girl is not present!"

As for the rest of this fic... I laughed at the ending when I realized
what they had in mind. I didn't find the middle part to be as funny ...
but maybe it's just me.

Gary Kleppe
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