On Wed, 7 May 1997, Redneck Gaijin wrote:

Who's talking about -Ranma's- assumptions? That's -my- view of how Akane is
portrayed here.

["I'm angry. It MUST be Ranma's fault! I'll punish him for existing!"]

 That is how the manga protrays her.  She attacks Ranma at the slightest
assumption.  As for the cooking incident, well, despite the fact that it
turns out toxic all the time, she continues to try and fail.  She never
listens to Ranma, and always assumes that he is making fun of it.  Why did
she try in the first place?  Simple.  She temporarily snapped under the
strain.

Don't buy into it.

For every occasion in which Akane mallets Ranma, there is an open-hand slap,
a toss-over-shoulder, a splash of cold water, or- *gasp* - nothing. Akane is
*NOT* so mindlessly violent as you portray her. 

 The incident in the dojo?  Explainable.  Akane was angry that this
"fake" Ranma had taken over the body of her fiancee.  Notice how she
treats Ranma no better than Nodoka.  Thus, she was quite likely to
explode at any given time.  Maybe I should put this in?

No, you should get rid of the angle altogether. Leaving aside the fact that
Takahashi already DID this story once, Akane is not such a homicidal maniac
as you seem bent on starting her out as. 

While I'm on things which don't work, what's with the curse? Suddenly
Ranma's curse is locked into place, with no explanation whatsoever. Within
the framework of the R 1/2 universe, there is zero credibility for this.
Explanation of some sort is required, and fast.

 Besides which, the fanfic is not done.  I am not going to portray her
the same way through out the entire story.

That's even **WORSE.** Characters *MUST* be consistent with themselves. If
you make a change, it must be believable and supported by internal or
external causes. Turning Akane from Homocidal Violent Bitch into Considerate
Mournful Martyr overnight just plain won't cut it.

As much as I would prefer you buried this concept under peat moss and
composted it for a year or so, I would point to the above as required
changes to make this fic workable in and of itself.

Oh, and one other thing; the fic has absolutely zero comedic content. That,
above all else, is a fatal flaw in any Ranma fic, IMHO.

Redneck

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