Ranma/Xfactor crossover
This is interesting; I think the two milieux are mingling well, and I'm
eager to see more of X-Factor reach Nerima, or more Ranma cast go to
Washington, whichever (if either) you have in mind.
 I suggest slowing down, offering more physical description when a lot
of characters, or unfamiliar ones like the main villains, are in a
scene.
Although I'm a Peter David fan, I only read Hulk, so I don't know that
much about X-Factor; but is their HQ so flimsy that knocking out only
one wire can sabotage their phone system? I would think a government
organization would have cellular and satellite phones, radios, etc., so
in part 2, Jamie should have other ways to contact them. Couldn't he
also call someone he knows in the area to carry a message to HQ? Or call
another government agency? Perhaps I misunderstood the nature of the
sabotage done.

"Actions Speaker Louder than Words"

I haven't read vol. 38 of the manga (Sorry Sean), so I'm "treading on
thin ice" with some of these comments. Please disregard anything that my
ignorance makes foolish.
1) In the opening section, Akane seems to apologize rather more quickly
and easily to Ranma than I'd expect.
2) Don't waste space by repeating the mundane. Kuno gets in a full
paragraph of repetitive ranting. Since what he says has no plot content,
you don't need so much of it. Look for other places like this in the
installment, where a reader who's Ranma-familiar can fill in the blanks.
Replace those with your more original ideas that you were saving for
later.
3) It's best to bring forward the strong plot elements quickly. You do
have Nodoka telling Ranma to be nice to his fiancee, but the
consequences of this are so slowly and subtly developed that they don't
capture interest as powerfully as they could. P-Chan almost getting
neutered also seems kind of muted. The interesting stuff comes in at the
end of the installment, as a cliffhanger--but what would happen if you
began with it?

I look forward to reading the continuations of both.

DRM