Brazil:

This is a great 'fic.  I think though, that the 'necessary' element of having one
person narrate the 'fic is broken by Aeka's stream of consciousness near the end
of the 'fic.  If maybe you described what she looked like, her eyes lighting up
and so forth, it would be more in line with the feel of the rest of the story.

Foxtrot the Furryous, CBTFH, reet.