I got half way through this story when I noticed some flaws.

1)  There are two rule threes.

2)  NOOOO POOFTAHS!  

3)  There are some minor spelling mistakes.

4)  NOOO POOFTAHS!

5)  For an otaku fantasy world, it's not that bad.  But there are some problems
with the characterization.  Kasumi is fine, but Ranma's taking his reactions
to the otaku a little to blandly.  I mean, if she knows about Ryouga, it would 
mean that she might know about him too (I'm taking this from Ranma's p.o.v.).
Plus, Akane *never* admits her feelings about Ranma to anyone, unless it's a
"Ranma gets Akane" 'fic.  (I have read Bitter End, btw, and that is one
slick piece of work).  This would be a nice self-insertion 'fic if the author
gets those characters down right.


Foxtrot the Furryous, CBTFH, ret.

P.S.  and 6)  Nooooo Pooftahs!