This story is by Ryan Anderson <andersor@nag.cs.colorado.edu>.

This was great!

I for one really liked the way Nodoka was portrayed. Too often she's
used as a plot device, as someone for the author to talk through and
whip the characters into shape. I still think your story could be served
better by a more balanced portrayl of Akane, especially considering the
wonderful depth you've given to the other characters.

BTW, I agree with you that a Shampoo-Mousse relationship probably
wouldn't work. I know which character I think would be good for Mousse,
but I ain't saying who until I get a chance to use the idea myself. You
can't have it! It's mine! :-)

Gary Kleppe
kleppe@execpc.com, Home page http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe
My fanfics and the FFML map are on my comics/manga page,
       http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics