At 12:51 AM 5/4/97 -0500, Keener wrote:

Monica/Akira-chan wrote:

<snip pathetic Immortals playing with the very Dragons of Heaven>

Well, not really DoH or DoE yet... and never, actually.

	Sigh, never did like his ending in X! Subaru had gotten my attention
long before Kamui and his ego (but then again, I guess he's entitled)
showed up on the scene. Nice to see the kid getting his own. 

Hey! Tokyo Babylon and quite a bit of X is on Subby/Seichan...
*sigh* X MOVIE... ARRGGHH! Eye candy, but they forgot plot... and *Sob* How
_Could_ they do that to all the Subaru/Seishirou fans out there? Dead in the
1st 10 minutes, and the fight itself only lasted 3-4 minutes...

	But in Highlander??? Oh well this story is great. Great detail and well
thought out dialouge. I KNEW they'd be kissing sooner or later and I not
only forgive you, I thank you for it. Well thought out and not
overshadowing the story but adding to it. Good job.

*Grin* Oh well... at least no one screamed at me about that...

	I was a bit dissappointed at the lack of symbolism but having the new
part of his life change him and his life (cherry blossoms NEVER frame an
immortals face) I guess it was nessicary and now that I think about it,
appropriate. 

	Two things though. One, PLEASE stop putting so many characters speaking
at once in one paragraph. It's getting kinda confusing. Also, I did
think that chapt 10 was a bit heavy on the expostion but those two are
the ONLY things I could find that distracted from this otherwise great
story.

*Grin* You think 10 was bad? Wait till the end...
As for the many charas speaking... *Sigh* That's the trouble w/trying to
carry on dialogue... there are only so many beats you can put in before you
need someone to say _Something_

	Sigh, this is deppressing, the ONLY flaw I could find in your writing
was a slight defincy in the fight scenes (which may be because of the
story type). Other then that, heck, I might as well give up now.

/sweatdrop- fights are never my specialty, and especially occult types where
I _do_ not even want to attempt to understand what the heck Subby/Seichan
are doing... 

	Can't wait for the rest!

Side note: Unfortuantly, Kamui seems to prefer decapitations (X movie)
so I guess Subaru is STILL out of luck ;)

*sigh* Rather...
Monica prefers Seichan's hand through chest, and then make into cherry
blossoms type of thingy...

Monica et al
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