very good plotting; I liked the way Ranma's past was 
exposed. I thought there was enough plot ideas for a three 
or four part series at least and that's not counting the 
ending which could a whole story by itself.
I saw a few minor misspellings but on the whole this was 
an interesting but to compacted story almost an outline 
IMHO but enjoyed very much and look forward to more from 
this author whether other stories or revisings of this one.

I like it too, but you should have made it look like all the senshi were his 
friends, because on the road, he needed them badly. I don't know if you did what 
I just said, and if you did, good show. But the thing that shocked me, ranma has 
THIRTEEN children, OH great, more little egotistical monsters running around, as 
if one was bad enough.

signed;
Shiroi-Kuma sama
aka Christian Clark



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