Subject: Re:[fanfic] Return to Ecaflowne |
From: Andrael |
Date: 5/2/1997, 6:57 AM |
To: fanfic@fanfic.com |
Kevin Shiue, Your fanfic seems rather too fast-paced, and skimps quite a bit on the details. Details add to the overall mood and believability. They also makes things less confusing. There were parts where I couldn't tell if it was a dream sequence, or if it was really happening. Hitomi's return was rather abrubt; slow down, explain things a little more! You've got some interesting ideas. I hope you can get the other parts out soon. Good luck, and thanks for listening. Andrael ^_^