Nicholas Leifker wrote:

Okay.  You asked for it...

My first reaction when reading it was "this seems familiar..."  The
work reminds me a bit of the opening to a work of mine called "Kurobara"
in terms of feel and setting, so much so that I was a bit upset in the
initial read.  Upon closer inspection, though, while the settings may be
very similar (Kodachi enjoying the feel of her run along the rooftops),
the interpretation of the character is different, as is the perspective.

	Gee.  I've never read "Kurobara".  I'm very sorry if my thing 
was overly similar to yours.  Now I'm embarassed.  Eep.  
 

Now, going on, and why people may have ignored it some:

1. Similar works have been done.  To put it bluntly, you're facing some
serious standards now that other Kodachi works have been done, and the
work simply does not stand out.
2. It doesn't *go* anywhere.  I was left wondering where the rest of the
story was.  As it stands, it's a simple character portrait.  Make a story
out of the work.

	I suppose I intended it to be pretty much a character portrait. 
 Sort of a poetic thing... It was just an idea I had.  I guess there 
wasn't enough to it to make it go anywhere.  It did turn out a lot 
shorter than I hoped for.

	Thank you for being thoughtful enough to respond to my pathetic 
plea for attention!

		Sincerely,
		Andrael


"Nobody's creepy from the inside, Hazel.  Some of them are sad, and some 
of them hurt, and some of them think they're the only real thing in the 
whole world...  But they're not creepy."
				---Death, "Death: The Time of Your Life"