OK!  Skipped a day in there, but I was exausted last night.  So, here
we go with another round of C&C!

First on the list is a Lemon fic, "The Price of Passion" by Cindy
Toler.  Now, when it comes to Lemon fics, I rate them on a slightly
different scale.  They still have to be enjoyable to read and make sense
like all fics, but I also rate them on, well, an 'arousal' factor. 
Let's be honest, all of us has at least a small hentai in them, and
lemon fics are one way to express it.  Sadly, I must saw that 'The Price
of Passion' failed in almost all ways.  The start of the story left you
asking exactly what had happened in the house that night, the theater
scene seemed to be rather bland, and I almost had to force myself to
continue reading.  I actually managed to skip a coupla parts of the
story the first time I read it, and when I actually managed to read it,
I really didn't enjoy it.  Sorry, Cindy, but I really didn't like this
one.

Next comes "Ranma and Shampoo, Part 6" written by Donny Cheng.  All in
all, it seemed to me, at least, to be rather dry, and definatly skewed
toward the Shampoo and Ranma school of thought.  Honestly, I think it
would flow a lot better if at least there were some cushioning in there
that made the final decision a lot better.  Not bad reading, but could
be a lot better.  Keep on writing, and practicing!

Ok, that's it for today.  I am currently working on a fic of my own, so
the reviews might get spaced out some, however, I am gonna try to keep
this up.  Zen, if your listening, A major rewrite of parts one and two,
and i will be posting to the list now.  Thanks for your assistance!

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