On Thu, 24 Apr 1997 01:30:51 -0400 (EDT), Matt Urban wrote:

I have just finished reading POH, and I now feel obligated to comment:

I appreciate it!

2.  Plot: kinda funky.  I think you brought Ashura into the mix WAY too 
quickly.  It would seem more logical if you had some good reason for her 
being in the area with the rest of the Jusenkyo gang.  Although maybe you 

This is a good point, I'll think about it.

	a.You allowed P-Chan to become immediately familiar with Ryoga's 
body.  P-Chan was even fighting where he would have trouble standing.

I figure that P-chan had been using Ryoga's body before this story, as a
matter of necessity; something I borrowed from "Hello Again". So he's
had time to practice. Besides, 

	b.Kuno finally gets both his loves! Forever will you remain a 
diety in my mind

I am the God of Weight Loss! (Sorry, that's an in-joke for people who
were on the Ronin list last month. :-))

for giving Tatewaki someone other than Nabiki or the 
cheerleader, whose name I can't seem to remember.

Mariko.

 The Kunos, to you, 
say, "Kudos, to you!"(You dare mock the great name of Kuno through the 
use of inept alliteration?  I shall smite thee!)

Hey, brudda, dere mo' Kunos den jus' Tachi! You goan get de buzz cut fo'
dat! ;-)

Thanks again for your comments!

Gary Kleppe
kleppe@execpc.com, Home page http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe
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