On Tue, 22 Apr 1997, Shazorn wrote:

On Tue, 22 Apr 1997, Anthony Woo wrote:

I just read The Party and I thought it was great.  It seemed real (as far
as anime gets real) you know what I mean.  It dealt with real problems and
there were no easy solutions.  I'm looking forward to the rest of it.

	As I've said before, me too.

	Thanks!  I _should_ have the chapter done by the end of the week 
(though, truth be told, I'm really, really bad with deadlines...)
	Ummm... I wanted to thank you (Shazorn) for your feedback the first 
time around - it was really quite usefull.  The problem is, every letter I 
sent (and I tried a few times) got bounces (with couldn't send after 
4-hours and 5-days messages).  Did any of them get through?

I think you should drop the scene where Ryoga gets hit by the bottle cap.
It detracts from the mood of the story, takes us away from the action.
Besides Ryoga isn't that stupid.  He wouldn't blame something like a
bottle cap out of nowhere on Ranma.  Besides you don't really need an
excuse for Ryoga to go after Ranma.

	No, no!  Leave it in.  It's perfect, a small gem.  And, oh yes 
he would.

	Heh.  Actually, I am planning on leaving it in.
	It wasn't there to give Ryoga a motivation to persue Ranma (he's 
laready got enough of those...)  Mainly, it was a spacer, a cute little 
scene, and, most importantly, just to signal that Ryoga's gonna be a part 
of the overall story...