On Mon, 21 Apr 1997, Hitomi Ichinohei wrote:
: The Bubblegum Zone: Technical Aspects Log
:
: In the year 2032, MegaTokyo was the site of Genom, the Mega
: Corporation that had taken over the production of boomers, non-sentient
: androids that were officially developed to help mankind. Unfortunately,
: ethics were not what they could have been, and the heads of Genom decided
: that adapting these biomachines to war and other uses was a good idea.
Surpriiise!
: Their only opponents were four women, known as the Knight Sabers.
: That was until an unexplained phenomena carried a young red-headed
: Canadian university student from his campus in the 1990's to this place he
: was very familiar with...
Shouldn't that be "phenomenon", singular? Alternatively you could
remove the "an".
: This file is the first of twenty that describe the general
: operations of the hardsuits used in the Bubblegum Zone. While each suit
: is individual, and made to suit a specific purpose,
The suit was made to suit. Perhaps a synonym would be better in
the second case. "Fit", perhaps or something like that.
: In the case of critical stress failure, the plate will hold together sue
: to the way the material sandwich is put together.
"Due to"
: Materials:
:
: Ceramal type eight
I thought that stuff was called "ceramel", although I might be
confusing it (or - even worse - quote a spelling mistake as a
correction. :)
: Another advantage of this system is that by
: increasing the field momentarily in an area, the effects of a self
: contained energy blade, such as the plasma sabers, can effectively be
: nullified by creative a magnetic field for the blade to bounce off of.
"Creating a magnetic field"
: Electrical Impact: 99.4% reduction in impact energy.
Heh, makes Bert glad, I'd wager. :)
: Softsuit:
:
: Vocal Log:
:
: "Before Priss, heck even after Priss, it been hard for me to
: design softsuits due to the ergonomic considerations.
"has been hard"
: "Thanks to some bloody inconvenient safety devices Sylia installed
: in the original series of hardsuits and softsuits, I can no longer leave
: any part of the manufacturing alone in case it happens again.
In case what happens again?
: "Now others on the team, specifically Sylia, Nene, and Linna,
: would love to keep the system in the suits as a way of keeping Priss and I
: in line.
"Priss and me" It's in the objective case.
:
: Item: Mono-molecular Ribbon Attachment.
:
: The ribbon and the technology that is inherent in the bilateral
: controls was redesigned by Sylia in the year 2034.
"were redesigned", I think.
: Softsuit:
:
: Vocal Log:
Hmm? What's with the "Softsuit:"? Am I missing something?
Sebastian