Just read burnt lands, but I missed Ch1.  Would you send me a copy?
Now, on to C&C: first, I didn't notice any glaring grammar errors, so I 
suppose you did that right.  You kept the tenses of your verbs 
consistent, which is easily the most difficult aspect of writing in the 
present tense.  My figuritive hat is off to you.  Plot:  I can't say too 
much about the plot without having read chapter one.  This didn't seem to 
be a major plot development chapter, but more of a history chapter.  
About Ranma's history: I am a major opponent of flashbacks.  I realize 
that you needed some sort of plot device to explain Ranma's history, but 
the flashback still left me somewhat disoriented.  I'm not too sure if 
there is another way you could have explained his history, however.  
Maybe have him tell it to Akane if she asks about his motivations?  
Finally, one last thing: it is possible to tell if you are hitting a 
pressure point properly or not.  I think that you should elaborate that 
Ranma is simply sucking up the pain from the pressure point.  It would 
give the reader more insight into Ranma's mindset at the time.
								-M