One thing I notice in your fic: very few direct quotes.  The reader 
doesn't really get the impression that he/she is witnessing the events 
the way great pieces of fiction do.  The changing POV's don't help this 

I'm not trying to write a great 'fic, or even a good one.  This is 
just a topic I fused on when an Idea struck me.  I don't really know 
what I'm writing about until the part/scene/episode is finished.  
Although I _defintely_ know what was going on when my computer dies 
in the middle of a scene.  Let's just say that I had to re-write the 
first scene in this part...And, as I've told other people, I don't 
just "write" something...I _experience_ it.  Let's just say that I 
still haven't gotten over that scene.  FYI, Alternate Landings has 
been put on hold for at least a week, to allow me to get over the 
feelings of Rape I went through for that scene.

at all.  One final point: I was suprised to find out that Ranma was 
actually Happosai's biological son/daughter.  His unwillingness to be 

Funny, huh?  That was actually part of the Idea that started the 
'fic.

called "Father" is the main reason that I believe he either kidnapped 
Ranma, or took him away through some form of coercion.  Beyond those two 
points, not too bad.  (The subject matter being addressed is not 
deserving of flames.  You deserve a lot of credit for writing about the 
issue of child abuse.)

Well, not everyone thinks so.  As for the no direct quotes...that's 
just how I write.  Can't really complain too much about my own 
style...I don't see anyone commentint on everyone else's styles...:)

Oh well, I've got to get to bed...big test tomorrow...(And me not 
studying....that's fun!)


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