Thanks for the C&C.  Just about everything you mentioned will be fixed 
shortly.  As for the 'plot hole' with the lingerie store, I created a fix for 
that, but I'm not sure whether I want to put it into chapter two or 
incorporate it with the next scene involving Happosai.  It's very 
Happosai-like, and explains *why* he would want new undies quite neatly.

Gary: So what do you think so far, guys?

Hiroshi: I like it so far! That was a very suspenseful ending.

Daisuke: Yeah, it's an exciting build-up. I still don't believe that
Happosai needed Akane to go to the lingere store, though.

Gary: Maybe it is kind of a plot hole. Okay, suppose you were Happosai.
What would you want from Akane?

Hiroshi: Uh... um... heh heh

Daisuke: Huh huh huh huh

Gary: Excluding things that you *know* she wouldn't be willing to give
you!

Daisuke: Um...

Hiroshi: I guess we can let this one slide.

Daisuke: Yeah, I can't think of anything either.

Gary: We'll be back with chapters 3-4 in a day or two. 'Bye for now!

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Alooooha, keiki!! Dis de principal speakin'! Got any fics you wan' dese
brudders to be readin' and makin' wit' de jokes? Make yo' request to me
care of kleppe@execpc.com . DON' be sendin' de fics until I ask fo' dem!
Jus' tell me which ones you wan' de boys to do.

De fics need to be ones dat were on de FFML. Recent ones are preferred,
'specially ones dat did not get a lot o' comments. De host, Gary, need
to be familiar wit' de series de story is based on. Ranma, or anyt'ing
else by de great Takahashi-kahuna, is OK. Or Ah! My Goddess. Fo'
crossovers, de host need to know ALL de series.

Write to de boys and let dem know if dere bein' funny enough. If not, I
be cuttin' down on dey food rations! Bye now!

Gary Kleppe
kleppe@execpc.com, Home page http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe
My fanfics and the FFML map are on my comics/manga page,
       http://www.execpc.com/~kleppe/comics