Before you comment, I have a backlog of things I did not have time to
read and have been getting to it as I get the time.

They stood that way for a moment, before they both realize that it 
is getting late, and they should be getting home. 

	I would rephraise that to fit in more with the general storyline.
something more in line with their responsible natures.

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Good characterization in the intro. it fits in with what I have seen of
the anime.

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Rising Fr
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She looked at him for a moment before blushing even more,but then > gave up, dragging both of them into the bathroom...

Who dragged who?

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Meiko looks at the elderly couple in her room. She has managed, at
the very least, to get dressed and look respectable.

Elderly? I think not, they should be middle aged if she is about 25. 
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Miwa's characterization should be a little more playful while he is in
joker mode. it would help with the storyline and would light up the
depression a little easier. 

	Verry nice to see that he has a good sence of hearing. verry funny too
the situations it puts Meiko in. What grates on my nerves is the use of
the reporting style used. This is something that is personal prefference
but I can't help but get annoyed by the missed descriptive
opportunnities I feel are inhetent in this piece. Either than that I
have no problems with the piece. 
	Nicely thought out and portrayed for what it's worth. Just the
reporting style could be beter explored for a more sentimental or
psicological feel.