Subject: Re: [teaser][R1/2]Happi's Delight
From: "Shadow Dancer" <danceshadows@geocities.com>
Date: 4/1/1997, 7:39 PM
To: fanfic@fanfic.com

Eric Lai warped time thus:

Well, taking your own comments at face value, I will *attempt* to offer
comments on this fic...

	I look at this vision of loveliness before me, hardly daring to 
believe that finally...
	"Come to me, Happi darling..." She calls me, beckoning me, teasing 
me.
	"Of course, my lovely," I say, walking closer, disrobing on my way.
	"Oh, Happi, you're so manly!" she cried as I finished removing my 
clothes.
	"Of course, my sweet Nodoka, only for you."


Well, it's sick, but it does conform to (at least what I heard about Nodoka)
Nodoka's views on what is considered manly... (I heard that she considered
peeping toms manly) so theoretically, she would go for the most *manly* man
she could find... but its still sick even though it makes sense

I was trying for sense, the sickness just crept in there while I 
wasn't looking...:)

	"But Pop!" I cried.
	"No buts, Ranma.  You're my son and I order you to jump in this 
pool!" Father _is_ serious.  Well, at least it will keep him from 
groping all the girls we pass.  I don't like it when he's unfaithful 
to mother.
	I sigh, and jump in the spring, feeling...something...changing.  I 
jump out of the pool as soon as I feel the changing complete.  I 
look down, to see a girl where I used to be a boy.
	"Ranma, my sweetie!  Now I just have to splash you with this..."  
a cold wave of water flies at me, and I don't bother to dodge.  I 
know that this will make me a female permanently, but I don't want 
to disappoint my father.
	Right after the wave has passed over my body, I feel father 
glomping onto my newly-grown breasts.  I sigh, and sit down, 
patiently awaiting the rest of the treatment...the same treatment 
I've seen father do to mother.
	I wonder, idly, what it will feel like to glomp onto a girl, now.  
No other way to find out than to try it.

The one problem here, is that I can't really see Ranma being so much like
Happosai, I like to think that even after being raised by him, he wouldn't
stoop to Happosai's level and shamelessly glomp girls... I hope you change
this if you continue this fic.

I never at any point alluded that Ranma didn't feel shame at 
glomping, it's just that he has to...while his father is around...:)

All in all, it seems alright, for a fic, I'm almost curious as to how this
will turn out, and to who exactly Ranma ends up getting engaged too...
Genma's daughter, or Soun's?

Erm...I don't have Genma paired with anyone...probably going to have 
him die off in the past...probably Akane (I _still_ believe that 
Akane is the only Fiancee for Ranma)

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