On Fri, 14 Feb 1997 20:12:43 -0600 Richard Lawson wrote:

: Part 6  Screams in the Dark
: 
: by Richard Lawson

: A few minutes later, he was wolfing down a hastily-prepared 
: breakfast.  The cabin was a quiet confusion of people preparing 
: food and eating it, trying not to look at the long wooden box that 
: was substituting for a coffin.

Hmmm, I'm not so sure whether spelling it out works better than
before.  Just calling it a box and referring to the reluctance of
the team members and then letting the reader figure it out is
probably better.  My main problem in getting it last time was that
you said it was right before Ranma, and since everybody was
eating, I assumed it was lying on the table and thus a small box. 
Only after thinking about it for some time and reading about the
others' reaction to it again, I realized that it must be the
coffin.


: Nouma frowned slightly.  Giving it a name also but limitations on 
: it that weren't necessarily justified.

"put limitations"


Sebastian
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