AAARRRGGGHHH!!!

You rotten BASTARD!  How COULD you?  ;_;

Here I was, on my way home, with Richard's fanfic in my hand.  I get to 
Central station, so I think to myself <Train won't be here for a while, 
let's read the 'Fic.>

BIG MISTAKE.

I got halfway through the story when a big lump was in my throat.  I 
should have heeded the warning.  But, noooo...  I had to press on, didn't 
I?  BAD MOVE.  I spent the rest of the trip teary-eyed and still don't 
know how I managed to clear my vision enough to open my front-door.

I haven't even *seen* Nuku-Nuku, but somehow Richard Lawson managed to 
create a fic laden with emotion that just grabbed me right here <thump>.

You absolute Bastard.

I'll never forgive you for this, you realise.  ;_;

<sniffle>

The only real criticism I have is that the story jumped a bit here and 
there.  The final scene with Hiro and Yui (while nice in itself) simply 
did not fit the short-story format where the story should end on a bang.  
Also, the arc with Kei was never properly resolved - he simply disappears 
from the picture.

To overcome these problems, you may want to conside rupgrading this Fic 
from short-story format to Novella.

Overall, though, a splendid effort.

But I'm still not forgiving you.  ;_;




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