On Fri, 14 Feb 1997, Louis-Philippe Giroux wrote:

has been down since the morning of February 12.  Could someone possibly
send me the fics I missed  during that time?  By that I mean all the way
from the 12th through today at the time of this message?

	Oops.  Can't help you with that... been off the ML myself...
 

Chapter 4

   She looked up the time. *Mamoru has probably arrived at the train
station for some time now*.  Not knowing what else to do, she decided to go

	That sounds a bit awkward... more like, '...arrived at the train 
station a while ago...', or something...

   Ranma and Akane pushed the gates and went inside the shrine grounds.
They looked around and saw the staircase leading to the shrine itself.
Seeing no one on the grounds, they decided to climb the steps to the
shrine. They stopped when they neared the top of the stairs.

	I dunno.  Those four sentences sound a little choppy, or 
something.  Maybe joining 'em together, or not repeating the word 
'shrine' or 'stairs' as often...

   "What? Don't you even remember me Rei?" answered Ranma with a smirk on
his lips.

	That may be redundant... where else would you smirk?

Shinto priestesses didn't deal with monster on a regular basis, right?

	Heh.  Irony, right?  But that should either be 'a monster', or 
monsters... 

totally missed the tone and aonly heard the message

	Oops.  SLight typo - 'only'

   "Ahem!"
   All the girls suddenly noticed Luna, impatiently waggling her tail and

	I'm not sure if a cat wags its tale when impatient...

   Usagi suddenly remembered something: "Oh yeah, we also found out Mamoru

	Ahhh... I dunno... this seems like a rather quick transition into 
something as important as what Usagi brings up.  Maybe some small 
buildup, or pause in the conversation while they mull over the last 
subject...

<I'm not finished>

	Damn.  I like this story... <grin>
	Sorry about the nitpicky C&C...
	Can't really comment on the content, though... at least, not 'til 
you're done the rest of the chapter.  But I like it... it's an 
interesting SM/Ranma mix.

	Later!
	-Mike