Richard Lawson scribed:

here's a story that doesn't end happily.  In fact, I found myself 
crying while writing some parts.  Oh darn, I've just revealed 

I'm not surprised.  That was... powerful.

I added the scenes back in when one of my prereaders felt that 
there was something missing, ending it like I did.  So I added the 
scenes back, and another one of my prereaders felt that the scenes 
were too unnecessarily depressing.  I want to know what you think; 
would it be better to leave out the final stages of Nuku Nuku's 
breakdown?

Well, I think it was too beutiful to cut.  Also, that last bit with Hiro
gave the right tone of hope to the end of Nuku Nuku's story.

Anyhoo, let me know if you read this, and what you thought of it, 
even if you hate it and me.  :)

All in all, one of your best, IMHO.

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