Well I like the idea, and would like to see it continued. I must admit I
found your way of writing in present tense very strange, but what the hey,
it's refreshing.

While you should certainly keep calling Misaki 'her' in the first bit, I
think that for future episodes you should either get Misaki a different 
name for her male side or use the kun/chan suffix to allow the reader to 
tell when she is a he. And vice-versa. Take it from a Ranma reader, the 
dual sex thing can get confusing if a fanfic gets big enough. However,
in the first part I think it is a good way of showing the confusion of
her newly acquired gender.

Looking forward to more...

First of all, thanks for the C&C!  I really appreciate it.

I'm still trying to work out my own writing style, so its no wonder it's
strange to you.  Heck, it'll still probobly be strange after I've been
writing prose for a while :) !

It looks like you caught the point I was making.  Yes, I purposely kept
refering to Misaki as 'her' even while she was male, to emphasize how
strange that this new experience is to her.  From now on, I will make a
distiction between male and female Misaki, like you suggest.  I think
I'll probobly go with Misaki-chan for female and Shima-kun for male.

The one thing I'm not sure about is whether or not I should write it in
First person, or third person limmited...What do all of you think?
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