This was funny!  I hope you get to finish this story someday.
However, I have information leading me to believe that it 
wont be easy for you to keep writing this...

"Kyone-chan, don't you think you should be writing Magic Knight Ranma,
instead?"  says Fuu, with a hint of distaste.

Fuu would call you "Kyone-san" even if she was mad.  Politeness is her watchword.

of the shcool's wrestling club, and one of their best fighters.  It was

"...school's..."

<snip>

The two
girls eat the food as it falls down, and instantly become extremely
fat.  They run from the ring in embarrassment.

Was the food magic?  This is a good synopsis, I think, since I haven't 
read any Futaba yet.  But I'd like a better explanation of the food, or if 
it was just an SD sequence thrown in for laughs, please say so.

<snip>

For those of you who know nothing about Futaba-kun Change!!, check out
the Futaba-kun Change!! homepage at:

http://otakuworld.com/dov/fkc/

THANK YOU FOR INCLUDING THE ADDRESS TO A FUTABA INFO
SOURCE!  This is VERY nice, I don't have to look them up on Alta Visa,
I can just go there. Thank You, Thank You, Thank You, Thank You.

<snip>

	A few hours later, the thunderstorm still hasn't stopped.  Misaki has
made her way home, to her room.  She slowly takes off her clothes, until
she is in just her panties.  She gulped nervously, looking at her new
body, before carefully taking off that last article of clothes.  She
sauntered over to her mirror, while she averted her eyes from her
reflection.

Ummm, I think you're handling the "OH Megami-sama I've got a _____!" 
thing rather well. Just for your info though, (blush) if you're naked and
sauntering across the room and you have a _____, ...well... it tends 
to swing back and forth, bumping each thigh in turn, so it will make 
itself known before you open your eyes or look in the mirror...

( I can't believe I'm going to post this.  Oh well, Truth Marches On!
 whip, whap, whip, whap, whip,...)

	"One...two...THREE!"  She turns her head to her mirror, and sees her
man's body, in all its glory.  Even though she knew what to expect, she
still sank weakly to her knees' at the sight.  *Why?  Why is this
happening to me?  I've got this...thing...dangling from me!

You know, a young lady raised in Japan might automatically squeeze her
legs together when she falls to her knees.... It wouldn't be polite or ladylike
to sit there with you're legs spread. Misaki's going to learn not to do that 
rather quickly though.

<snip>

	Right then, all her dreams crashed down around her.

Second time you said this.  It isn't bad, but if you could think of another
phrase...

	The bell at Komatane Junior High rang.  Misaki walked into her
classroom, which is empty of desk and people, save Shimeru-kun.

"...empty of desk and people..."?  There have to be desks, right?  
this line confused me.  Then I read on and realized it was a dream sequence.
Still, maybe you don't need to foreshadow it just this way.

<snip>

	"Oh, I know what we can do!  Tonight, after you get back from school,
I'm going to invite some people over for dinner," her mother said.  "We
haven't seen them since before you were born, but they are good friends
of your father and me.  They also have the same sex-changing abilities
we do."

Would they call it an ability?  Or would they call it a problem?  
Even 'physically challenged' people aren't necessarily 
politically correct around their own families.

	Misaki perked up a bit at that.  "Who are they?"

	Her mother grins.  "I think their son goes to your school.  They're the
Shimeru's."

	Misaki crashed to the floor as she fainted from shock.

I'm curious to see how you handle Futaba and Misaki meeting.
If Futaba already knew and was being polite, that would be 
too easy I think.  I see them being VERY shy around each other,
and yet they might have trouble staying their birth sex just talking
to each other now.  I do look forward to the rest of this fic, I really do,
It's just.....

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End Misaki-chan Change! Part 1
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ATTACK OF THE MOKONATOR!!!!

_____________________________________
I stole most of these characters from Clamp,
but one is kind of a crossover.........
All of them, even Kyone, are DEFINITELY 
used without permission.
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*Four girls, one apartment, bad idea.* thought Kyone to herself.  
She was lying on the bed, having bandaged her scrapes and 
covered her sore spots with Liquid Heat(tm). The lights were
on.  Fuu was tapping away at the computer, working on a 
Java program she was writing for class.  Hikaru was flipping
through one of Kyone's Anime Art books, humming a cheerful
little tune as she did so.  Umi, much more reserved, was half 
way through the latest issue of the Japanese equivalent of 
VOGUE.  She was never going to get any rest as long as 
they were here, Kyone reflected, and yet they weren't 
going to leave until she wrote a story with them in it.  
*At least they let me post the Futaba story,* she thought.

A soft but solid "bump" came from the door, and then
a second "bump."

"I'll get it!" Hikaru began cheerfully.  She jumped up to answer
the door.  Kyone heard the door open, and then Hikaru said
"Ah! Mokona!"

*Can't she get a better line?* Kyone thought as she recalled how
Hikaru had said that at least once every other episode.

Sounds of "thump, ... THUMP,... WHUMP,..." came toward her
and then...

"OOOPPHH!!"  Kyone bent double as a much heavier than natural
Mokona leaped from the floor to land on her stomach.  "HEY!  Watch 
where you're jumping!"  

"POOOOOO!" went Mokona.  It didn't sound exactly right.

"Hikaru," asked Umi, "when did Mokona start to wear expensive 
dark glasses?"

"I've never seen Mokona like this," Hikaru answered in a puzzled tone.

"POO! POO! POO!" Mokona jumped up and down on Kyone's stomach.

"UMPH! OWWPH! AHH!" Kyone let out.  "GET OFF!"  With a lot more 
effort than it than it should have taken, she pushed Mokona off the bed.
It made a definite but muffled 'clang' when it hit.

"Clang?" asked Fuu, Umi and Hikaru together.

"Po-Po Po PO Po Po POOO!" ('asta la vista, baby') said Mokona,
as it's forehead jewel beamed into it's hand what can only be described 
as the Really Big Automatic Magnum Pistol (RBAMP).

"BWAAAAAA!" replied Kyone, she dodged.

Mokona fired. "BWAM, BWAM, BWA-BWA-BWAM!"  Very big holes 
burst out in the wall as Kyone dodged the fire.

"I didn't know Mokona used guns!" said Hikaru.

"It must be very mad at Kyone for putting off the REAL 
Magic Knight Rayearth fanfic again," Umi replied as she 
covered her ears.
 
"I don't think that is really Mokona-san," Fuu insisted.

"I WONT FORGIVE YOU!" Kyone yelled, just before ducking 
her head to avoid a bullet that hit the wall.

"BWAM" went the RBAMP in Mokona's hand.

"Mokonaaaaa, SHIN NE!" Kyone yelled.  Suddenly time slowed, and,
for someone who was rather critical of shojo transform conventions,
a rather pretty impressionistic background sequence went on and 
the Magic Knight Rayearth Sword readying theme played as 
Kyone drew her marvelous Escudo Sword.  She took her long 
but absolutely inviolate moment to pose heroically, them swung 
the sword at the seeming bipedal bunny.  Her sword cut the gun in 
two, made a bloody gash in Mokona, and sent its body skittering across
the floor. 

"MOKONA!" yelled Hikaru, agast.

Suddenly the adrenaline left Kyone.  She remembered what a sucker Hikaru 
was for cute animals.  Fearful of having to confront a weeping, inconsolate
if slightly, cutely, boyish redhead, she turned to Hikaru, only to see all three
Magic Knights frozen in horror.  She followed their gaze.

There seemed to be a pulsing synthetic soundtrack in the background.

In spite of it's impossible injury, Mokona sat up. The bloody gash had 
torn some of its white fur away.

"I am quite confident," Fuu whispered, loud enough for everyone to hear, 
"That the real Mokona-san does not have a skeleton of chrome metal, or 
mechanical eyes that glow red." 

"POOO POO!" said the Mokonator.  It's head jewel glowed again and 
what can only be described as the Way Big Double Barreled Shot-Gun
(WBDBS-G) appeared in its hand.  Again it took aim at Kyone....

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To be continued...with "Mokonator vs Mashin!" unless Kyone, at a minimum,
puts out a new chapter of "Magic Knights Ranma" and preferably begins her
long delayed REAL MKR fanfic.

-|--|--|--|--|--|--|--|-

>From the portable hospital bed, underneath the body cast and traction 
restraints, Kyone muttered and fumed... "...I'll get that dirty Nutley,
...He's not so tough..."

Fuu spoke up from the computer.  "You have two personal messages 
Kyone-san.  The first is from someone named Urd, she wants to 
repay Nutley-san for something that happened in his AMG fanfic 
"Plague of Skulds" and offers her unrestricted assistance.  The 
second is from Nutley-san himself to you. He references Urd's 
message and says quote '...I double-dog dare you!' endquote"

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Jim Nutley
Kunoranter First Class
(Humble Too!)