On Wed, 29 Jan 1997 01:31:09 -0600 Hitomi Ichinohei wrote:

: Chapter Four:  If There is Something Strange... 

: "The true test of command is being able to track of all the
: small details.

I think that's supposed to read "keep track", right?


: 	Not for the first time, he wondered if listening to everyone and
: starting his own business was the best idea.

I think "had been" is a more appropriate time for this sentence.


: 	After showing him his discoveries about the Knight Sabers and
: SkyKnight, Ikagawashii face had grown thoughtful, and, curiously,
: suspicious.

That should probably be "Ikagawashii's face".  The comma after
"Throughtful" is superfluous.


: *Oh shit!"

That should be another asterisk instead of the quote.


Oh, and good work on catching that vigilante, Hitomi.  :)


Sebastian
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