On Thu, 6 Feb 1997, Monica/Akira-chan wrote:

OK, this is probably going to be a bit cheesy and mushy... That's ok...
It's supposed to be. Now, I've only seen up to P9, and the other new 
OAV's up to 16... so if some of this has already been done, bear with me. 
I would really appreciate C&C, especially about the OCC-ness of the 
characters. Keep in mind that I just wrote this today, so it's rough. 
Enjoy!

All right, the first all Patlabor story posted this list. Since I'm a big
Patlabor fan I'll take some time to offer a few comments about the
story..:)

First let's deal with the what you think might be the biggest problem with
this fic, which was the fact that the characters might be a bit OCC. But
given the fact that the characters are wonderfully round in the TV series,
your actually in character in this story. Even the Ohta is the hot head of
the SV2, he does care for the others and he does show during the series.
Also Noa's reaction was well within character (espically since this takes
place after the OAV series) for what has happened to Asuma. So I found the
character interaction to be suprisingly good. 

One small compliant though, that is with the use of Takeo...I'm more used
to Kumnagi for her name then Takeo but that's just a small complaint...

Anyway great Fic that's a nice look at the Personal Relations in
Patlabor...Great job!!

Ja ne!!

Richard Beaubien
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